FrozenRoyalty
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Ah I get it now...the pasta from outta space was being facetious.
How do you stretch Jordan Weal into two parts anyway? It's like an anthology or something.
Right on Gann, I can't wait for part 3
Gann must have made a big purchase of Jordan Weal stock at Fantex![]()
Ah I get it now...the pasta from outta space was being facetious.
How do you stretch Jordan Weal into two parts anyway? It's like an anthology or something.
Ok...I'll just limit myself to one or two question interviews with prospects.
Really folks?
Nevertheless, even after three years with the Monarchs, the Kings’ AHL affiliate (which will become the AHL’s Ontario Reign in the coming season), as with the vast majority of young prospects, questions abound.
Nevertheless, even after three years with the Monarchs, as with the vast majority of young prospects, questions abound.
Nevertheless, even after three years with the Monarchs, questions abound.
Okay, let me speak my piece. Just my opinion, because writing style is writing style.
I'm good with a million questions. It's all about asking as much as you can, and filling up your column as much as you can. Your pieces are informative in that manner.
The problems is getting there. I find myself frustrated with a lot of information that just isn't required. The best example I can see of this is the following sentence:
This could have easily been boiled down to the following:
The point is made, the sentence flows naturally, and the uninterrupted connect to the next paragraph comes easily.
You could have even edited out one more unnecessary part:
Now, obviously you do your homework. I am not complaining or irritated about that. But you can get rid of the unnecessary stuff and make your stories flow better. Perhaps even get it down to one article, period. I know I would definitely be inclined to read from beginning to end with much more enjoyment. But as it stands now, I just get exasperated and frustrated with all the stops and starts that the unnecessary completeness causes.
You have to know your audience. Everyone here knows the Monarchs are the Reign next season. Everyone here knows they are the Kings' affiliate. And everyone here even knows that prospects all have question marks associated with them.
I know this is just one example. It's the only example I saw in this particular article because I stopped reading (again). Just too frustrated to go on. It happens with every article you write. I definitely can appreciate the completeness of the articles as I would go deep into facts in my own written reports as an LEO (necessary, of course).
And I will give you this: your stories are much more detailed then the garbage we are seeing on major news stories from CBSnews.com and CNN.com. That is a strength. Again, just airing my opinion here.
My feeling here is if you peeled away the unnecessary verbiage in your articles you can easily become the top writer for the Kings, including the daily newspapers. I sincerely mean that.
Just my opinion. Don't chop me off at the knees just because I feel this way.
Don't forget that I don't just write for the hard-core, highly knowledgable hockey fan. I also write to educate those who aren't that familiar with the game. But I get what you're saying. In any case, you're also free to not read my work, as is everyone's choice. Not every writer "works" for every reader.
Gann, I doubt there are very many reading your work that don't know the game. I mean, you post the articles here, right?
But I will leave it at that. No offense intended.
Love it, Gann. Thanks for this interview. I really, really hope this kid succeeds this season. If he can take the third- or fourth-line center role and run with it, that would be a huge positive for this Kings team. Lewis is a great player – one of my favorite on the team – but let's be honest, he's better served as a winger.
King - Weal - Brown
Clifford - Shore - Lewis
Nolan, Andreoff
I'm all for it.
tldrokay, let me speak my piece. Just my opinion, because writing style is writing style.
I'm good with a million questions. It's all about asking as much as you can, and filling up your column as much as you can. Your pieces are informative in that manner.
The problems is getting there. I find myself frustrated with a lot of information that just isn't required. The best example i can see of this is the following sentence:
This could have easily been boiled down to the following:
The point is made, the sentence flows naturally, and the uninterrupted connect to the next paragraph comes easily.
You could have even edited out one more unnecessary part:
Now, obviously you do your homework. I am not complaining or irritated about that. But you can get rid of the unnecessary stuff and make your stories flow better. Perhaps even get it down to one article, period. I know i would definitely be inclined to read from beginning to end with much more enjoyment. But as it stands now, i just get exasperated and frustrated with all the stops and starts that the unnecessary completeness causes.
You have to know your audience. Everyone here knows the monarchs are the reign next season. Everyone here knows they are the kings' affiliate. And everyone here even knows that prospects all have question marks associated with them.
I know this is just one example. It's the only example i saw in this particular article because i stopped reading (again). Just too frustrated to go on. It happens with every article you write. I definitely can appreciate the completeness of the articles as i would go deep into facts in my own written reports as an leo (necessary, of course).
And i will give you this: Your stories are much more detailed then the garbage we are seeing on major news stories from cbsnews.com and cnn.com. That is a strength. Again, just airing my opinion here.
My feeling here is if you peeled away the unnecessary verbiage in your articles you can easily become the top writer for the kings, including the daily newspapers. I sincerely mean that.
Just my opinion. Don't chop me off at the knees just because i feel this way.
tldr
As much as many say Lewis is a W, and I agree, Weal is as much only a C. I don't believe he would work on W in the Kings system. You're taking away about 80 percent of his game if you don't let him flow through the C role.